There was
one more left of…Let me start by explaining all the other things that come before
that. There was a gang of people waiting to get one. (If you want to know what they were waiting for read some more) There was over 1000 people waiting for
one. Suddenly…THEY ALL RAN OUT… everyone was pushing through the earth to get
that last one. THEN…one person called Jack pushed and shoved and finally
reached out and grabbed the ONLY left. Still everyone pushing and shoving. No-one knew Jack took the last one…people were getting really hurt…
Wow Bethany, what was it they were pushing and shoving so hard to get?! You have definitely interested me with your response to the prompt. Maybe just reread over your writing to make sure it is really clear for the reader.
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Mary (Team 100WC, Australia)
That was fantastic! I like how you kept the last one anonymous
ReplyDeleteDaniel S-F,Year 5
Wow Bethany I love the way you made it more interesting by using the 1 more left.
ReplyDeleteBy Phoebe
Can you tell me some more about jack
ReplyDeleteMolly and phoebe